Writing Workshop: birthday present

In the Writing Workshop series, we work together to improve our writing skills: to learn how to write better and more correctly in English .

What you see below is a poorly written text with quite a few mistakes:

You don’t seem happy of your birthday present. Don’t you like it? What?! You wanted diamond necklace?! Who do you think am I? Bill Gates? No! I never said I will buy you jewellery! Stop to have such unrealistic expectations. You are married with a teacher, not a banker!

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Jean-Marc L
Jean-Marc L (@jmalemahieu)
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3 years ago

Apparently, you don’t like the birthday present, do you? What did you hope? A diamond necklace? Do you really think I am Bill Gates? I never said I would buy you jewellery! Stop such unrealistic expectations. You married D. Trump not a gentleman!

Delaram F
Delaram F (@delaram)
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3 years ago

You don’t seem happy with your birthday present. Don’t you like it? What?! You wanted a diamond necklace?! Who do you think I am? Bill Gates? No! I never said I would buy you jewellery! Stop having such unrealistic expectations. You have got married to a teacher, not a banker!

Blandine L
Blandine L (@blandine)
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3 years ago

You don’t seem to be very happy with your birthday present. You don’t like it, do you? What did you expect? A diamond necklace? I am not Bill Gates! I have never said that I will buy you jewellery! Stop having such unrealistic expectations! You have got married to a teacher not a banker! (I just hope it is not one of your experience, Pejman!????)

P H
Reply to  Blandine L
3 years ago

Fortunately not! :-)

Farid A
Farid A (@farid)
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3 years ago

It seems that you do not like your birthday present, do you? Do you like a diamond necklace? Have you mistaken me with Bill Gates? I’ve never said ,”I’ll buy you a jwellery“. It’s better not to have unrealistic expectations. Your husband is a teacher not a banker.

P H
3 years ago

Here is one way of correcting the text:

You don’t seem happy with your birthday present. Don’t you like it? What?! You wanted a diamond necklace?! Who do you think I am? Bill Gates? No! I never said I would buy you jewellery! Stop having such unrealistic expectations. You are married to a teacher, not a banker!

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