A few days ago, I decided to run the famous race of Maroilles, the 20 kilometers of Maroilles! I wasn’t very trained. Even if I run regularly, I haven’t run a lot of time in April, but instead of staying at home, I decided at 12.00 to go and discover this famous run. The weather was grey, a little bit cold but not too much, perfect for running. Let’s go! When I arrived over there, it was crowdy of runners! Almost 4.000 runners!
Are these corrections right? When I arrived over there, there were plenty of runners. Runners were clapping their hands. But as soon as, we began to run I immediately understood … I ran on the trainers of my neighbours. My 4th right toe began to hurt myself but I contemplated the landscape, trying to think about other subjects in order to remove the pain. Sometimes it disappeared for a couple of minutes. …a sharp rise of 2.5 kilometers It was the first time in my runner’s life… at the grandmother’s pace! Despite this pain,… PS: I didn’t officially subscribed to… Read more »
my performance was pitiful.
Thank you for the correction.
Honestly, I preferred the previous version when you highlighted our mistakes with the correct words. It was a better way to learn from our mistakes. With this new version, I won’t ever know why I made a mistake and I won’t learn new words or phrases. ;-(
Although this new policy make us work harder to correct our own writings, I agree with Blandine sometimes this job become more difficult.
This job becomes more difficult even impossible!
Here is how you can improve the text: But as soon as, we began to run I immediately understood … This contains punctuation problems and redundancy: But as soon as we began to run, I realised… I ran on the trainers of my neighbours. “I ran on the trainers” doesn’t mean anything, and what do you mean by “neighbours”? The runners around you? Just ahead of you? My 4th right toe began to hurt myself … began to hurt. in order to remove the pain in order to (distract myself and) forget the pain in order not to feel the… Read more »
Thank you! I couldn’t guess any of your corrections. But I still don’t know how to explain that the runners were so numerous around me that I touched some trainers sometime to time.